Owch lol.

First - yeah, photoshop is exactly what it says: a photo manipulation program, not a drawing program. Sounds as though this other program is pretty good? who makes it?

Crit - the only problem I think I have with this page is the bandages on the attackers hands are the same exact color and shading as their hair. I suspect that while this might be on purpose, monotoning them down somewhat into a kind of sinister scarecrowish feel, it means that the action in the last panel is a bit washed out because it's hard to see where the hand and hair are. Now, I don't know what texture either their hair or the bandages are meant to be (as I said, it might be the same, which is spooky) but adding a slight texture to the bandages might help break up the colors, even if the color itself remains the same.

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I love it. Autodesk makes it and truly, I've found it makes such a difference in the control I have.

Hmm, texture on the bandages huh, thanks! I may just try that! I was noticing how washed out that panel looked myself but yes, they doo need the same color as the scarecrow-ish feel was definately what I wanted. But the texture idea sounds like a plan XD I'll go give that a shot XD Thanks!

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"Pudge controls the weather."--lilo

Well it's now two months that I read your comic (and I finally understood a piece of the story ^^ ") and I like much this story.
I'll make an honest critic. I don't mean better designer than you, but I am however able to detect the smallest defects on an drawing. I want to help you. ^^


SCENARIO (general)
The scenario is interesting, although I admit that I had trouble understanding what kind of world you take us to the top.
I did not find an intro. If you have not made one, he might be thinking.


DRAWING (general)
As you mentioned here, the previous pages were "too messy and uncontrolled. This point has been corrected, although I see a few duds here and there. I see that your hand trembles at times, you can try to solve this problem by varying the thickness of the pen.

Now I will address a point that bothers me greatly: colorization. Oh shades of colors are OK, I have no quarrel with that. Not the problem is the lighting that gives the impression of seeing a colorization "draft", no-definitive. To remedy this, I knew only three things to use: layers, layers and layers XD. A layer for the main color, one for parts and a light to the darkest (after you can add much more than that but I am speaking in general).

Quick Tip: Use a set of layers for the main picture (it's with the background) and another for one or all the cases and one for the edge of the box. This will allow you to erase if you overflow (for example)cith the color without affecting the rest of the drawing.

Your font is too formal, not very adapted to comics.
Here are some websites offering useful free fonts:
[link] (the best of the the best, but in french)
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[link] (fonts pay, unfortunately)


DRAWING (page 16)
( story style : Nice situation. Events accelerate and I like it. )
I don't understand at the beginning that the girl had destroyed the woods and tubes.They lack a bit of movement. And pass a little more the box than pieces of pipe or wood could enhance the effect. ^^

This critic is finished, for you to judge its usefulness or its uselessness. ^^ I hope that is not too boring or badly translated...



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An other program you can to interest you : the GIMP. (it's all free)

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I forgot the mood. ^^"

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The mood is recalcitrant T_T, sorry.

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Duse, wow, this is awesome! Thank you so much. It's so rare to get real critiques anymore. You put a lot of thought into this and I really appreciate that, matey. XD

As for the coloring, I do use the exact layer system you speak of. I just freehand on all the layers and so it just comes sown to, probably I need to spend more time cleaning up edges and what not. I'll attempt that.

As for Gimp, I know of Gimp XD It's a cool program. It's got the same issue as photoshop when it comes to lines though. That's why I tried Sketchbook for the lines. And seriously, it made such a difference.

but yea, this is a seriously helpful crit. I'll try to see if I can do better and apply some of this to the next page, thanks XD

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"Pudge controls the weather."--lilo

Good stuff bud
Though I found it a little hard to notice some of the texts, they don't seem to contrast enough to catch my eye when lookin for text. Or it may just be me.

Sketchbook Pro! I'll have to look out for that one, I have the same problem.

As for the crits:
Making the word balloons a different color for every character is going to get hard to read pretty quickly. It's usually better to stick with the tried-and-true black-text-on-white-field. The grim colors work fine for otherworldly demons who don't have any actual dialog outside of "graar I'm gonna get you," but if your lion guy is going to be a regular character who talks a lot, I'd suggest giving him normal-looking word balloons.

I think your linework is just fine, but you could be using your colors a bit better. Make things that are closer brighter and darker, and things in the background more faded and less defined, and it'll make it easier to tell foreground from background at a glance. And the page easier to read as a whole.

Hope that helps some. I'm enjoying the story so far, so keep it up!

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